Suicide Note

Posted: October 12, 2022 in Friday Fictioneers
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I constantly check my reflection in your eyes.

Am I pretty? Too fat? Too thin? Too loud? What do you think of me as I cry while you call me stupid and punch me over and over again.

Why am I not good enough?

My world revolves around your ups and downs. Trapped beneath your umbrella of greed I wear gaudy greens, blues and reds per your request. I am the pawn you play because I am beautiful. With me on your arm men with money give you whatever you want.

No more.

I wish you nothing but pain. Lizbeth

  1. trentpmcd says:

    Brutal. I missed the title at first, so had to check when I hit that last line…

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  2. neilmacdon says:

    Raw and brilliant, Alicia

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  3. Bear says:

    Remind me never to get on your bad side then… LOL! I’m going crazy trying to get a full outfit for dancing done by Ach… tomorrow! Anyway, wanted to pop out and tell you I closed the post box, too expensive. Will be getting mail at the house now. Will send info email.

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  4. Iain Kelly says:

    Like Trent and Neil before me – raw and brutal. Well done.

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  5. Bill says:

    A sad and difficult story told in such a way. But, well done.

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  6. Powerful stuff.

    You’re good at this writing thing! 😉

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  7. granonine says:

    This took me back to a couple of memorable clients in my counseling office. I was able to help them escape from a similar situation without going to the extreme solution. Beautifully written.


  8. CGraith says:

    It pains me that this is a suicide note because he really doesn’t lose, she does, better if she planned his demise or took off without a trace.

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  9. Dear Lish,

    I’m sorry Lizbeth found no other way out. Sad story. Good use of the prompt.



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  10. plaridel says:

    simply brutal. she deserved better.

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  11. michael1148humphris says:

    I pressed like, but only that you penned this so well. As I would have hoped that she would not let him win. Suicide is not the right path

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  12. msjadeli says:

    Alicia, I’m guessing Lizbeth was looking into her own eyes in the mirror? Such a horrible ending to a sensitive soul that was driven by her shadow.

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  13. Brilliantly done, Alicia. I noticed the title after I read the story. Like you said, it’s tragically true for so many who are beaten down both physically and emotionally. They genuinely feel there’s no way out, and at least they can hurt the person who hurt them, somehow.


  14. Laurie Bell says:

    What a horrible life they’ve lived through. They’ve made a tough choice. I can understand it given what they’ve suffered through

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  15. Tannille says:

    It’s so sad she couldn’t see a more hopeful way out. I don’t judge her. Her partner is a brute.

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  16. Dark, and so well written 👌


  17. Nobbinmaug says:

    It’s always sad when anyone’s in that position. It’s worse when they feel that suicide is the only way out. Well done.

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