Nightmare

Posted: August 9, 2017 in Friday Fictioneers
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“Gawd that’s a big snake!”
Even though it was lying on its side, eyes staring at the trees, nostrils oozing sticky yellow goo and dead as dead could be, Tommy’s knees shook as he kicked the monster’s nose.
“That there critter ate your mamma and Uncle Tony and Auntie Sis.”
Tommy spat in the crook of the snake’s half-open mouth.
It groaned.
“Lordy! Boy! You done brought it back to life! Run!”
Tommy tried. He really did. But he felt as if he were running through mud. Getting nowhere fast.
SSSSUUUPPP!
He woke, tangled in bed sheets.

 

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Comments
  1. James says:

    Yup. Nightmare. Bet he’s glad it was just a dream.

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  2. Iain Kelly says:

    Not far off my worst nightmare too. Terrifying.

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  3. michael1148humphris says:

    What a nightmare, brilliant

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  4. Oh good grief! I almost had a heart attack!

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  5. plaridel says:

    thanks goodness, it was just a bad dream. 🙂

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  6. Dale says:

    Bet his heart was a-palpitating as well! Quite the nightmare…

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  7. Moon says:

    Oh my God! What a nightmare!
    So well written , Alicia!

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  8. Nan Falkner says:

    Wasn’t he happy it wasn’t real? Cute and clever story!

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  9. draliman says:

    I’m shuddering just thinking of having a nightmare like this. Nice one!

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  10. Lynn Love says:

    Nicely nightmarish, Alicia. That feeling of being trapped, unable to escape. The worst thing about dreams. Beautifully done

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  11. Lordeee a slippery slimy nightmare.

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  12. gahlearner says:

    Ah the walking through mud nightmares, don’t we all know them? This turned from horror to fun, Alicia. Great writing.

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  13. wmqcolby says:

    Surreal and a whole lot of fun, Alicia! I had some eerie dreams myself in the past. Even some days ago. No more pizza before bedtime! 😀

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  14. Urghh you wrote that so well I could see it unfortunately! Good job Alicia.

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  15. pennygadd51 says:

    Now I know Tommy’s okay, I can go ‘Teehee’! Nice humorous twist, Alicia.

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  16. I love the voice in this. Well done.

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  17. Some nightmares are thankfully just dreams. Wonderful effect you created, Alicia.

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  18. rgayer55 says:

    I’ve had plenty of snake dreams. They always terrify me, even rubber snakes. I’m glad I read this at 6am instead of midnight.

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  19. Laurie Bell says:

    Eeew what a horrible nightmare! Hope it is not a sign

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  20. Dear Lish,

    You had me going. That’s a good dream to wake up FROM. Well done. (as always).

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • Thanks, Rochelle! I had a hard time with this one and wasn’t going to write anything (plus the fact I’m spending the weekend up in Vancouver, B.C. with a friend at Bard on the Beach https://bardonthebeach.org and wasn’t sure I’d have time to comment on other FF stories. Don’t like to submit if I don’t have time to read.) But this was fun to write. Always, always appreciate your comments.

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  21. Liz Young says:

    Now you point it out that does look like a gaping snake!

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  22. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover says:

    What a nightmare. I hate snakes and now will be thinking about them the rest of the day. Nice take on the prompt.

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  23. Miles Rost says:

    Ugh. As bad a nightmare as a clown that hunts children. Well done!

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  24. Gosh! What a nightmare! Glad it was one and not real.

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  25. Oh my…that was a close one!
    Shew..glad it was just a dream.

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  26. subroto says:

    Some nightmares feel so real. Nicely done.

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